The Writer's Sphere - Share your writing

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by DarkRula » Tue Oct 08, 2019 9:21 am

*applauds*

That's great. Nice one.

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PostRe: The Writer's Sphere - Share your writing
by shy guy 64 » Tue Oct 08, 2019 9:47 am

Nice poem orange

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PostRe: The Writer's Sphere - Share your writing
by Tafdolphin » Tue Oct 08, 2019 1:33 pm

OrangeRKN wrote:The last longer poem I shared was about reading - this one is about writing. My repertoire is as expansive as it is diverse!

It's tentatively called "A Writer's Curse"

While all good authors want to find
A universe within the mind,
I only offer this short verse
Explaining of the writer's curse.

With pen in hand and tale to tell,
An empty page near stops me dead;
Confounded by all those who dwell
Within the story in my head.

They've built a wall to keep me out;
The world beyond removed from sight.
A mystery behind the shroud
With history I cannot write.

The page is blank, my efforts meek;
That wall remains a hopeless climb.
The source of my malaise I seek
Forever further back in time

Until I finally see at last
The force behind my fiction's strife;
A dragon from the mythic past,
The first idea brought to life.

Discerning his imagined state
He rages at this author's hand
And wages war against his fate
Across all of my fictive land.

The creature roars, my writing slows,
The story ends in faltering prose.
Upon my mind descends a fog;
A dragon's spell of writer's block.


I was talking to my wife about poetry last night actually, spurred on by introducing her to Longfella and John Cooper Clark, and it reminded me just how impenetrable I find the medium. Efficiency with words is a real talent (one reason why I love Cormac McCarthy so :wub: ) but I cannot for the life of me write anything poetic without it sounding pretentious as.

All of this is to say, this is really nice Orange. And I can empathise.

I wrote a review of Telling Lies. Reviews too are something I struggle with, that balance between pure informative writing and opinion. This one isn't bad, but isn't especially revalatory either.

http://rikgodwin.com/2019/09/11/review-telling-lies/

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PostRe: The Writer's Sphere - Share your writing
by Jenuall » Tue Oct 08, 2019 1:39 pm

OR's poem has an inconsistent rhyming scheme.

2/10 wouldn't read anything from this author again.



Joking obviously, that's a nice poem OR! I always mean to pop in here and read the bits that people put up but never seem to find the time, it's nice to see some creative writing! :toot:

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PostRe: The Writer's Sphere - Share your writing
by OrangeRKN » Tue Oct 08, 2019 1:51 pm

It's ABAB book-ended by opening and closing stanzas of AABB - at least it's symmetrical! I think it adds weight to "stops me dead", as the unexpected rhyme change has a similar effect on the reader.

Thanks all for the comments! The "efficiency" of poetry does really appeal to me, I think it's similar to my like of highly constrained pixel art. The limitations help bring out my creativity.

Tafdolphin wrote:...but I cannot for the life of me write anything poetic without it sounding pretentious as.


I have to say I feel like I stumbled a little far in that direction with the phrase "this author's hand" (and that stanza in general) but I was aiming for a slightly more literative feel to reflect the brief moment of being able to write before once again being hit by writer's block... which I'm sure only makes me sound more pretentious :lol:

Tafdolphin wrote:I wrote a review of Telling Lies. Reviews too are something I struggle with, that balance between pure informative writing and opinion.


Another good review! I think that balance is largely a personal one, some reviewers (and outlets) lean more in one direction or the other. I appreciate the informative aspect when trying to learn about a game I'm undecided on playing, but the opinion is more lasting and interesting and can be revisited for discussion, so I think I prefer that.

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PostRe: The Writer's Sphere - Share your writing
by shy guy 64 » Wed Oct 09, 2019 12:58 pm

actually on second thoughts nevermind

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